10 step outline, take 2

Howdy, I have reedited my 10 step outline. Parts from the old one are still there, just changed the mid way to end part more.

1. Rykin out hunting in the forest, obtaining food for the upcoming days.

2. A colossus storm consumes the island full of torrential downfall.

3. Rykin starts his travel though the wet environment to find shelter from the storm.

4. Scrambling towards a small cave just a few hundred metres away overcoming the inundated areas.

5. Fleeing inside the cave to take shelter from the growing storm, unaware a beast is furious he has company in his cave.

6. Herded from the cave to escape the angrily attacking beast.

7. Seeing new shelter, the beast pouncing on Rykin from the bushes, Tumbling around fighting tumbling down a gully into a pit.

8. Water quickly submerging the two creatures fighting underwater trying to escape and kill the other before they are killed by drowning.

9. Destruction debris bombards the pit landing on the beast allowing Rykin to swim away.

 10. Escaping the hole and returning to his semi destroyed home to take cover instead of looking for other shelter.


-Joshua

The Beast

The bird has been changed to a creature known as "the beast". The beast will have the shape and some features of a panther. Low and fast and will attack over his territory. Sharp claws with a lethal arm,  The back shall resemble a fish, but I can not think of what it is called at the moment. Short black fur, with possibly a hardened skull area.

- Joshua

Conflict Sketch

Howdy, I have drawn up one of the major conflicts within my story. The story has changed quite a bit now, So I shall add up the information about the updated story soon. This post it mostly about the drawing. The creature know as Rykin and the beast have fallen into a deep hole, with the storm still over the island. With out caring about the survive of themselves, they are forced to fight in this hole which is filling up with the downfall of the rain. Fully submerged underwater, trying to kill the other and get out before they drown themselves.  

Joshua

The Creature Questionnaire

Howdy, I have completed the questionnaire for the man character, but I will only be able to place half of it up at the moment, I need to format the rest as it was do on the train.

What is their most treasure memory? The first friend he made on this island when he was rescued from the storm that sent his ship into this island.

What is the greatest accomplishment of the characters life? Is there anything they hope to do that is even better? Greatest accomplishment for the creature is living on this island peacefully in his home he made.  To be able to find his family would be his greatest accomplishment if he ever finds them.

What would be the one material item your character would save during a fire ? The creature would save his hunting spear that he made the first day he got on this island.

What in the characters life do they feel most grateful? To be living on this island where no humans can kill him, or study him.

How forgiving is the character? The creature is quite forgiving,  we will not take anything to heart. Only in rare occasions where he will not forgive the creature/animal. This is mostly when a pack of animals/ creatures attack him or one of his friends while they are alone.

How much does your character feel in control of their life?  The character feels in most control of his life, except when a natural disaster comes and needs to restart a part of his life that he has already completed. e.g. needs to start his live over again.

Is it easy for your character to ask for help when they need it? He will rarely ask for help, most of the time his friends will help out if they see him being attacked or is trapped, and he does the same for his friends.

What does your character strive for most in their life? Security, excitement

Does the fact that your character has never done something before increase or decrease its appeal to them? It does increase its appeal if it is exciting, but if it involves water, he will strive away from it.



When I get the rest formatted correctly, I shall reedit this post with that information

-Joshua

The Bird - Questionnaire

I have completed the character questionnaire for both of the characters. This one will be of the Bird in the story, The Villain

How did your character get here form there? The flock of birds kept flying from island to island every year, birds would drop off each year when the island was the correct one for them

What was their life like before the story? a yearly trip to another island as the bird wanted to find the perfect home, fun and free.

what was growing up like? growing up was hard on his wings when he flew from one island to the next. Other than that it was a pretty safe life.

Did they have a good or a bad childhood? A good childhood, but was the youngest in the family and was the one how got picked on the most.

What struggles have they had, or hardships they have overcome? Being the youngest and needing to how his brothers and sisters that he was as good as them

Has their life worked out like they have expected? Yes. Finally proving it his brothers and sisters, he found a nice island where the animals on the island had some slips and falls which were funny to him, deciding to stay on this island for the laughs.

Has their life been difficult or easy until now? After he came to the island, life was quite hard, but now it is just a breeze.

Were they forced into their current path, or are they here by choice? By choice, he decided to stay on the island.

Do they have any regrets? being the youngest, meant being the most daring, nearly drowning trying to show his brothers and sisters he is as good as them.

Did anything happen in their past that they cannot forget? Nearly drowning in the ocean when trying to prove himself to the rest of the family.

What special circumstances have made them into who they are today? Finding the animals on the island like to try new ways of achieving stuff, and finding the ways quite funny. Mostly when he sees the creature named Rykin, we likes to mock him.

Super Objective

Life, career, personal goals outside of the realm of the story? to live free and settle down to make a family. To mock Rykin

Defining characteristic?

introvert or extrovert? Extrovert

more thinking or feeling? Feeling

fears/ phobias? Water, animals that can climb trees.

Hopes/desires? To settle down in the tallest tree on the island

Dirty secrets? Moved one of his brothers into a different tree on night where there was a snake in the same tree. He did bribe the snake only to torment him.

Tends to be self-centred/ selfish/ selfless? Self-centred.

Favourite and hated foods/ drinks? Favourite food- Slugs, beetles, green berries, sea-weed. Hated food- Yellow berries, white berries.

 Most hated activities? Swimming.

Most enjoyed activities? Mocking Rykin, races.

Deepest secret or wildest fantasy? To live in the tallest tree and to rule the island over his brothers and sisters.

sense of humour? (what makes your character laugh)? Major, likes to mock some of the non-flying creatures that try new activities.

who is your character's hero? the elder birds. They fly from island to island their whole live, making a home on each island for when they finish the cycle and start again, they have a home to go to for the year.

Philosophy and morality? To live free.

 attitudes towards:

Self? Protecting.

Others? Likes to mock them, but will play games and have fun with them

Friendship? Major part of his life.

love? Wanting to find the perfect bird for him

Family? dislikes brothers and sisters.

Food for Thought

 The death of a loved one? Moan for their life back.

A natural disaster? Does not worry him that much, will go and find a new tree/ island to live

Meeting an old friend? Major laughter over dinner, catching up on old stories

Meeting an old enemy? Will mock them, and lead them into a trap

What would constitute a perfect evening for your character? The perfect evening would be him sitting on a tree chair with his brothers and sisters looking up to him.

If your character could wake up tomorrow having gained any one ability or quality, what would it be? To be able to swim underwater. As he hates water so much from nearly drowning, it is hard for him to get sea weed to eat.

What is their most treasured memory? finding this island he is at and making home here.

What is the greatest accomplishment of your character's life?  Showing to his brothers and sisters that he is a good as them

What would be the one material item your character would save during a fire? His birth emblem.

For what is your character's life do they feel most grateful?

How forgiving is your character? quite forgiving, takes everything on the chin, except when it involves his brothers and sisters.

How much does your character feel in control of the course of their life? Feels fully in control of his life

is it easy for them to ask for help when needed? He rarely asks for help, but it's not easy for him to ask.

What does your character strive for most in their life? To live in the tallest tree

How easily embarrassed is your character? He is not embarrassed easy.

Does the fact your character has never done something before increase or decrease its appeal to them? No, the only things this character likes to do is to fly, mock others, have fun and be free.


This shall give you some information about the villainous character in the story.



-Joshua

Analysis of the movie cars

I have been working one some rough scene drawings of the conflict.I shall get them up tomorrow. Manly this post will be about the movie cars. As I have been reading the book "Ideas for the animated short" (by Karen Sullivan, Gary Schumer, Kate Alesander). There is a section in the first chapter, so I decided to analysis the movie cars. 

I shall say who the Hero, The Mentor, The herald, The shadow, The threshold guardian, the Shapeshifter are/is. If you have not seen Cars, go see it before read this, It might, might not spoil some parts of the movie. 

Disney Pixar Cars.

Hero - Lighting McQueen

Mentor - doc Hudson

Friend - Mater

Herald - doc Hudson, Sally

Shadow - chick hicks

Threshold Guardian - Chick Hicks, but I would also have to say Lighting as well

The trickerster - Mater

Shapeshifter - Doc Hudson

This is my interpretation of these characters, but personally I find Lighting McQueen fights himself, with is young pride of wanting to be the best and to win the Piston cup. This being his major flaw, but in the end he over comes it in an astonishing way. 

I shall quickly review the primary and secondary conflicts in this movie. The primary conflict would be a fish out of water, as he is stuck in a small town with a population of 10 or so. The secondary conflict would be a journey which changes him in the end. 

- Joshua

Creature history

Howdy, always a bit hard to get a post in before the weekend comes. I have been thinking a lot about the creature and the villainies creature. For starters the good creature will be a mix between some different animals, but 1 part I would like to add to him is some sort of wings that goes from the elbow to the hip of this creature.  The only thing I can think of that would kinda resemble it would be one of the old spidermans where he had the web in that area.

As for the reasons for this wing, a bit of a back story which he will never forget. Watching how birds were free to go where ever they wanted, noticing that he had "Wings". Thinking that he could fly and be free. Going up to a beautiful ocean view, standing there on the edge looking out to the horizon, believing that his wings would be able to make him fly, Jumps off the 200 foot cliff.

20 feet down, and starting to flap his arms furiously, 50 feet and  and still nothing. A bird sees this creature and free falls with this creature to have some fun, mocking the creature as he falls. Now noticing the ground getting bigger and bigger, he starts twirling around in the air to slow down, landing head first in the ground, every bird around scatted from the place. Leaving his imprint in the ground.

The creature learned two important lessons from that day. 1: Do not try and fly off the highest cliff you can find, you will leave your mark.
2: never trust a bird.


The second character in the story, the "villainous" is going to be a bird as stated before, This is the introducing into the bird, but in the main "short" you will not see this, but the bird will be there. The bird is still in progress for what characteristics he/she will have.


-Joshua
  Note, Thinking about a name for the creature and thought of Rynik. Still going to think of more names and find the perfect one to use.

3 sentence outline

The three sentence outline for the creatures story is:

A devastating storms hits the creatures home, making it impossible to live there from all of the damage. Forced to find a new place to live with a villainous animal tormenting him along his journey. Seeking revenge from the villainous animals doings and finding the perfect home to live in.  

1 line outline

1 Line outline of the creatures story.

The creature's problems as he journeys for finding a new home as a storm destroyed his old home.


Joshua

10 stage outline.

Howdy, Its been nearly a week since my last post. In the next couple of posts, I shall be giving more information about the creature story. The list shall be: 1 line idea, 3 sentence outline (this will be redefining one of the previous posts). A 10 sentence outline and a Synopsis. Also going to start working on the locations and the creatures.

First of all I shall do a 10 step outline in this post

1. The main character will be revealed in his home.
2. A nice tropical storm will roll in and destroy his home.
3. The character makes the big decision if to stay and rebuild or leave and find a new home.
4. The character starts his journey to find a new home.
5. The villain will be intruded into the story, showing some of the major parts of him before his true reveal.
6. The villain mocks the character, makes him question his journey to finding a new home and leads him into a trap.
7. The character is trapped, but as he gets trapped, he sees the perfect house in the distance.
8. The character starts to plot revenge will getting out of the trap.
9. The character gets his revenge on the villain by using the same trap he was court in.
10. The character settles into his new home.



Joshua

The creatures story

In the last post, I added the end in that one. so I shall write the beginning, middle and end in a sentence for each.

The creatures get washed ashore from a devastating storm, now finding a new place to live on the island. Searching for a new home, only to find it is already taken as a home. Returning to his ship as nothing will every replace home.

Entry for a new start of idea - What we don't see.

This has nothing to do with the previous creature story or any story's, just thought it up. I am going to add the stories, ideas into this 1 blog and work from there. This idea needs a lot more working on as it just came to me. Also going to chuck around some different names for this one.

The story begins in real life with a child's hand opening the lid of a wind up box. inside is a house. as the child starts to turn the wind, the house slowly starts to rotate. After nearly half to a full revolution of the house, the camera zooms into the house though a 2nd story window, the camera continues to go out that room, down the starts and out the door will going through some other rooms. The camera goes out side the house to show a city. that is under attack. The house that the camera just went though also had the fight in there. Everything in the world is frozen until the camera gets focus outside of the house, and the fight starts again.


The rest of the story will be focused on a man that has to take the captains position and be in charge for the fight. That is the idea for now, it might change as time goes on.



-Joshua

The creature - Middle

The creature finds a nice tree that reminds him of the ship, staying there for half the night, getting moved on by a pack of squirrels that lives there. Moving on and finding a hole, resting there for a few hours few dawn. Dawn comes and he starts to more on, not liking the hole, he walks into a nice mud area, starting to make himself at home, he walks up wasps that live there and gets chased out. Finally returning to his ship, not liking the island and starts to slowly repair the hull and the ship part by part. 

I'm going to add the end up in the next few days, than going to rewrite each in a new post to turn it into a sentence or two for each section; beginning, Middle, and the end

-Joshua

The Beginning.

The beginning of the story film concept will start at the critical point. As the creature has been living on the pirate ship, the crew killed by the villainous pirates, the ship left to set its own sail. Caught in a deadly storm, smashing it against the rocks of an abandoned island. The creature surviving in the hull, left alone on this island. The creature sets out on a journey along the island to find a new home as the ship no longer sails the seven seas.

This is the beginning of the the story that I shall be redefining. This part of his story will happen before the long post.

This post may or may not make perfect sense until you read the previous one. After having some thoughts about the creatures and the story, This is what I have came up with.

The creature that is the main character needs to get to the other side of the island. As he lives on a wrecked ship, and knows that there is another wrecked pirate ship on the other side of the island. The creature is hoping that the item he is after will be on that ship. Believing that the item he needs to secure his home is on that ship, he sets out in search of that pirate ship.

This section will be added into the excerpt

Joshua

Pre-story for an idea.

A creature found its way onto a sailing ship in the 17th century, and lived in the hull. They lost a battle, all the crew where executed and the ship was left to find its own doom. Sailing for many weeks, it finally found its rest place on a deserted island wrecked upon rocks. As the creature grew, still living in the hull, collecting objects found on the island to secure and make it more like a place to live. As the creature adventured more on the island, finding that he is not alone with other creatures on the island. some friendly and some vicious. All the creatures are carnivore, making hunting for food harsh and they need to kill one other to survive, small packs are made with the different types of animals. E.g. Some of the small animals have made a bond with the large. The small will find large animals that will chase them, and lead them to an ambush where the large animals will kill them for food. the small animals also get their share in the food.

That is the history of the island and the main creature. The story is:

The creature finds out that a deadly storm is approaching the island, knowing that the storm will destroy his home unless he can find a object that will block the storm. This object will cover the entrance he uses which in theory should stop the storm. The creature knows both the risks of leaving his home with what could happen to him if he does, and what will happen if he stays and lets the storm roll in.

As the storm is three days away, he sets out as daybreak, trying to make some distance before all the animals and creatures wake up. As he follows the path that he has always down before, he gets to the end of the path, where it leads into the jungle where the most vicious and deadly creatures live. Knowing he needs to enter and get to the other end of the path, as traveling around it would take to long, he travels inwards. Keeping to the shadows and hiding when creatures are near. As his journey continues he walks into a nest of  animals, that only come out at night. He must slowly and quietly walk though the nest without waking a single one of the animal. The creature gets halfway and a part of his foot slightly hits one of the sleeping animal, holding dead still and slowly turning his head towards the sleeping animal to make sure it is still sleeping. The sleeping animal rolls over but hits another sleeping animal. The creature believes its save as he is unaware that the animal woke the other animal, he continues on his journey. Unaware that the animal woke and is stalking him for breakfast.  

As the creature finds a cave and sees the sun reflecting of the object that he needs to secure his home, he starts to become unconscious of the environment and hurries towards the object. Stepping on a trip wire that wakes up a spider. As the creature grabs the object and starts moving it, the spider comes down from its tree and starts making fierce noises at the creature. the spider starts attacking the creature, the creature attempting to run away and hide, the spider grabs him and starts to wrap him with his web. the creature helplessly trying to escape. The sleeping animal from before sees the spider and wants the creature for himself to eat, takes a running leap at the spider. Hitting the legs of the spider, releasing the creature from the hanging web. Falling on the ground as the spider and the animal fight, the creature breaks the remaining web from him and hides behind a tree as the animal and the spider go head to head for the victory to eat the creature. The animal runs into a bush and the spider follows, knowing this is the creatures only time to grab the object and make a dash for home. As he approaches home, the storm is only hours away from hitting the island. The sky turning black as each moment passes, the creature is determined to get this object to his home in time.

Arriving home just minutes after the storm has started to hit, using all his effort to get the object in the position to block the storm out from doing any more damage. he gets the object in position and hides in is home until the storm passes. Throwing parts of the top of the ship, trees falling. The creature is hoping that the object will hold. As the storm passes the island. the creature comes out from his home, happily knowing the object survived. looking out onto the beach and seeing the mess the storm has created. Animals and creatures roaming the beach to try and grab anything that could be useful to them or was theirs. 

-Joshua